英语杭州高考写作(高考冲刺：写作训练之句式训练二)

高中写作之句式训练二

教学目标：

1.掌握简单句、并列句和复合句

2.运用简单句、并列句和复合句的转换美化写作句子

批注：美化句子首先是简单句的润色，如变为简单句变为并列句，转变为简单句的的高级形式，简单句变为复合句等方式是句与句衔接的更紧密，更有层次感，可以通过简单的提问引发学生思考，最后给出几个例子让学生进行合并美化。

一、句子润色1：并列复合句和主从复合句专练

1.并列复合句： 1. Work hard, or you will fail.

2. Work hard, and you will get good grades.

3. I worked hard at English and devoted all my spare time to practicing English, but I failed to pass the mid-term examination.

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4. About 9: 00 last night, I was busy preparing for my tomorrow’s test when suddenly loud noises came into my room.

及时练：用适当的并列连词填空。

1. Half of the girls choose film and TV stars as their idols, __________ 48% of the boys favor sports stars.

2. However sometimes when you meet some difficulties, when you quarrel with others ________ when you fail in doing something, you may have a bad mood.

3. If you go through the gate, you’ll find the entrance to Bear Country. (美化句子) __________________________________________.

4. When he spoke, he felt more and more excited. (美化句子) ___________________________________________.

5. I got up late this morning. I didn’t catch the early bus. (美化句子) ___________________________________________.

Keys: while; or ；Go through the gate, and you’ll find…. The more he spoke, the more excited he felt. I got up late this morning, otherwise I could have caught the early bus.

2.主从复合句

1. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library (你叫我帮你还给市图书馆的那两本书).

2. We will meet at 8:00 am at the gate, where a blue bus will be waiting (一辆蓝色的公共汽车将在那里等候).

3.If you are interested (如果你有兴趣), please sign up at the office before 5:00 pm next Thursday so that we will make necessary arrangements (以便我们作必要的安排). 及时练：

1. It is said that slightly more than 50% students, _________________________ (这在世界排名第一), are short-sighted.

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2. ________________________ (在他进来后不久), he cried on his desk. 3. The causes for short-sightedness are so complicated

__________________________________(没有一种药可以治愈近视).

4.________________________________ (如果我是野生动物园的动物), I would feel annoyed___________________________________(当人们不断地同我拍照时).

5. He suggested that__________________________________________________(中小学生不要过分使用眼睛, 且要多做户外活动).

Keys: which ranks the first in the world; Shortly after I let him come in;that no medicine can cure short-sightedness; If I were an animal in the wildlife park, when people keep photographing with me; school children (should) avoid overuse of their eyes and do more outdoor activities

二、句子润色2：简单句的高级形式

简单句其实也可以不简单,若将简单句与非谓语动词短语、形容词短语、介词短语、同位语、独立主格结构等巧妙地合并在一起,不但可以表达更丰富的内容,而且也使句子变得更精彩,充分显示你在英语表达上的实力。以下各句摘自近年各省市高考写作范文的高级简单句,请欣赏、熟记、模仿：

1. 同位语

I want to have a pen friend, hopefully a girl in her early twenties and with interests similar to mine. 我想有一个笔友, 希望是一个二十出头且兴趣相投的女孩子。 即时练：

1.It disappointed everybody that he didn’t turn up.（用同位语从句改写） ___________________________________________.

2.一些人持有相反的观点，学生不应该上网。（用同位语从句造句） Some people________________________________________.

Keys: The fact that he didn’t turn up disappointed everybody. hold the opposite opinion that

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students shouldn’t surf the Internet.

2. 形容词短语

Born in American, Thomas Edison was a great scientist and inventor. 出生于美国的托马斯·爱迪生是一个伟大的科学家和发明家。(湖南) 即时练：

1.他又累又饿,但他继续他的旅程。 _____________, he went on his journey. 2.虽然筋疲力尽，他还是完成了任务。 ______________, he still fished the task. Keys: tired and hungry; exhausted

3. 不定式短语

In order to study well, we need to do sports. 为了学习好, 我们需要做体育运动。 即时练：

1. He is so kind that he can help me.（美化句子） __________________________________. 2. 他一直相信她，最终却发现她撒了谎。

He believed her all the way, _______________________.

Keys: He is so kind as to help me. just to find that she had lied

4. 现在分词短语

In this picture, a mother bird stays in her nest in a big tree, watching her babies flying away. 在这

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幅图中, 一个鸟妈妈呆在一棵大树的鸟巢里, 观看她的鸟仔飞走。 即时练：

1. When he arrives please give me an e-mail.(用现在分词美化句子) _______________________, please give….

2. Now our school has three teachers. They teach 48 pupils. Now our School has three teachers, _______________. Keys；On his arriving/ arrival; teaching 48 pupils;

5. 过去分词短语

Compared with letters and public phones, mobile phones and the Internet are faster and much more convenient. 与信件和公用电话相比, 手机和网络更快也更方便。 及时练：

1.She walked out of the room and many students followed her.(用过去分词作状语进行改写) _________________________, she…

2. Once it is seen, it can never be forgotten.(美化句子) Keys: Followed by many students; Once seen, it can …

6. 介词短语

Instead of giving us answers immediately, he encourages us to think by ourselves. 他鼓励我们独立思考, 而不是马上告诉我们答案。(湖南) 即时练：

1. 根据这项调查，有很多产品质量不好。 _______________________________________.

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2. 多亏了他的支持，否则我们不可能成功。 ___________________ or we couldn’t have succeeded.

Keys：According to the survey; many goods are of poor quality [牛刀小试]：

按括号中的提示翻译下列句子。

1. 我是李华, 四川的一个学生。(同位语)(全国) 1. I’m Li Hua, a student in Sichuan.

2. 与其他老师相比, 摩尔先生更注意教学方法。(用过去分词短语)(湖南)

2. Compared with other teachers, Mr. Moore pays more attention to his way of teaching. 3. 北京动物园, 建于1906年, 有100多年的历史了。(用过去分词短语)(北京) 3. The Beijing Zoo, built in 1906, has a history of more than 100 years. 4. 李华在公共汽车站等601公车上学去。(现在分词短语)(北京) 4. Li Hua was at the bus stop, waiting for Bus No. 601 to go to school.

5. 我们学生应当通过努力学习而不是考试作弊来获得好成绩。(介词短语)(福建)

5. We students should try to get good results by studying hard instead of cheating in examinations. 6. 合并句子:

⑴ The moon travels round the earth once every month. ⑴ The moon is a natural satellite of the earth.(现在分词短语)

6. The moon, traveling round the earth once every month, is a natural satellite of the earth. 7. 合并句子：

⑴ He was well known for his expert advice.

⑴ He was able to help a great number of people with their personal affairs.(过去分词短语) 7. Well known for his expert advice, he was able to help a great number of people with their

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personal affairs

三、句子润色3：简单句合并成复合句

有时为了使句子的连贯性更强, 表达也更为贴切、自然, 我们在两个或者多个简单句之间加上and, but, or(或者, 否则), for (因为), while(而, 却), when(就在这个时候), not only ...but also等并列连词, 使其成为并列复合句。如：

⑴ Our outdoor activity will last three hours. We’ll be back at about 11 o’clock

→Our outdoor activity will last three hours and we’ll be back at about 11 o’clock. ⑴ You must hurry. You’ll miss the plane. →You must hurry or you’ll miss the plane. ⑴ Honey is sweet. The bee stings. →Honey is sweet but the bee stings.

在两个或者多个简单句之间加上when, after, as, because, where, which, who等从属连词, 可以使简单句变成复合句。如：

⑴ We will organize all kinds of activities in our English club. We can not only practise but also learn more English in the activities.(改为含定语从句的复合句)

→We will organize all kinds of activities in our English club in which we can not only practise but also learn more English.

⑴ He missed the first bus. He came to school late.(改为含状语从句的复合句) →Because he missed the first bus, he came to school late. →He missed the first bus, so he came to school late. 即时练习：

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将下列各组句子合并成并列复合句或主从复合句。 1. He was tired. He went to bed.

2. Our teacher must be at home. The door is open. 3. ⑴ A satellite is an object.

⑴ A satellite travels in an orbit round another object in space. ⑴ A satellite is either natural or man-made.

4. ⑴ We high school students do have some growing pains. ⑴ We can get rid of them correctly and wisely. 5. ⑴ There was once a famous detective. ⑴ He was named Sherlock Holmes. ⑴ He lived in London.

⑴ The time was at the end of the nineteenth century. 6. ⑴ The other day we had an English speech contest. ⑴ I won the first prize in the contest.

7. ⑴ 79.3％ of the surveyed netizens say that their main motivation is to help their parents to live a better life.

⑴ 67.7％ claim that they work hard in order to change their own fate. 8. ⑴ Students can improve their writing ability in this way. ⑴ They can strengthen their self-confidence. Keys:

1. He was tired, so he went to bed. 2. Our teacher must be at home, for the door is open. 3. A

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satellite is an object, either natural or man-made, which travels in an orbit round another object in space.

4. We high school students do have some growing pains, but we can get rid of them correctly and wisely.

5. There was once a famous detective named Sherlock who lived in London at the end of the nineteenth 6. The other day we had an English speech contest in which I won the first prize.7. 79.3％ of the surveyed netizens say that their main motivation is to help their parents to live a better life while 67.7％ claim that they work hard in order to change their own fate. 8. Not only can students improve their writing ability in this way, but they can increase their self-confidence.

（建议10分钟，课堂未完成的部分留作家庭作业）

一.判断下列句子中有无错误；若有，请指出并改正 1．He is fat, and his brother is thin. 答案：and→but或while

2．He doesn’t like learning maths, so do I. 答案：so→neither/nor

3．Either you do it, or I ask somebody else to do it. 答案：√

4．Not only he sings well，but also he dances well.

答案：not only放在句首时要用部分倒装，因此应改为：Not only does he sing well，but also he dances well.

5．Neither has he changed his mind，nor will he do so.

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答案：√

二、根据句子意思，用正确的连词填空 1．He was hungry, ________he would not eat. 答案：but

2．______ are you funny, ________ you are witty. 答案：Not only；but also

3．The first was not good, ________ was the second. 答案：neither

4．Hurry up, ________ you’ll miss the train. 答案：or

5．I had a headache, ________ I went to bed early. 答案：so

6．I must work much harder,________ I cannot catch up with the other classmates. 答案：otherwise

7．It is very good，________ it can be better. 答案：yet

8．Some experiments are difficult ________ others are easy. 答案：while 三、翻译

1.他喜欢踢足球，并且踢得很好。 He likes playing football and he plays well.

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2.学校放学了，可是老师们仍然在工作。

School is over, yet all the teachers are still working. 3.他想当作家，而我则想当科学家。

He wants to be a writer, while I want to be a scientist. 4.雨下得很大，然而我们必须出去。 It's raining hard, however, we must go out. 5.你必须说真话，否则你将会受到惩罚。

You must tell the truth，or you will be punished． 6.动脑筋，你就会想出办法来。

Use your head, and you will find a way．

四．非谓语动词练习

1. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees,______________________. (一路上有说有笑).

2.____________________________ (参加英语演讲比赛)is a helpful way to learn English. 3. Our parents are checking our bags or diaries __________________________(是为了确定我们没有卷入任何麻烦事).

4. When they heard the news, they immediately set off for Shanghai.（改写句子） _______________________, they immediately set off for Shanghai.

5. Although I admit what she has said, I still think that she hasn’t tried her best .尽管承认她所说的话，但我仍然认为她没有尽最大的努力。

_______________________, I still think that she hasn’t tried her best. 6. She stood by the window and watched the sunsets. She stood by the window ____________________.

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7. Our English teacher speaks louder in order that he can make himself heard.(用不定式改写) Our English teacher speaks louder_____________________________. 8. She walked out of the classroom and many students followed her. She walked out of the classroom,___________________________

Keys: talking and laughing all the way; Taking part in English speech competition; to make sure we’re not getting into any trouble；Hearing the news; Admitting what she has said; watching the sunsets. to make himself heard. followed by many students

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